This may have already been spotted but..I just saw this.

The fury of Everild's Rage burns in Meantermel's eyes, and she roar is filled with that fury. His expression is one of overwhelming strength and determination to conquer all.

Unless she's gender-changed, it probably should read like this:

The fury of Everild's Rage burns in Meantermel's eyes, and her roar is filled with that fury. Her expression is one of overwhelming strength and determination to conquer all.